Thread:Ursuul/@comment-30270234-20170906141851/@comment-28083312-20170906231223

From what I read of the series, it was not implicit that they were Svartalf scions, simply “predators,” but they could have been a scion of anything. Svartalves have been known to work with/for others on several occasions (smithing for Dresden, apartment for Molly, relations with Mab, etc.) so it would not be unreasonable to assume the Svartalf was simply hired. So, rather than say… Harry Dresden soon realizes that the bullies are scions of an unknown sort. The svartalf is their guardian. …or… Harry Dresden soon realizes that the bullies are the scions of a human and a svartalf, and the coach is their guardian. …you might consider saying… Harry Dresden soon realizes that the bullies are predatory scions, with undetermined parentage. Coach Vogon, a svartalf, is their guardian. In the next edit, where Maria writes… The svartalf makes it a point to tell harry the two brothers are NOT his sons. It is never discovered who their supernatural parent is or what kind of creature they are. She is correct, per this:"“Point of order. They are not mine. I am not their progenitor. I am a guardian only.”"The syntax is a bit off, but the facts are sound. A rewrite would be better in this case than a reversion imo.