Thread:Tazenda/@comment-28083312-20190103103728/@comment-28083312-20190113103946

Here, this is the full section. It’s got some mad run-on sentences, which you should feel free to fix if you’d like, but it conveys the message suitably enough. My concern is that it basically came out as a summary of the entirety of Fool Moon, & perhaps it could’ve been written differently that focuses solely on Chicago with much less words. Three heavily-sourced paragraphs per-book is gonna be pretty insane, & you know that Dead Beat etc are gonna be even longer because the events of Dead Beat completely screwed with the city itself. I don’t know, I just feel like I could’ve gotten that section done in half a paragraph. Maybe something along the lines of:"The lobo killings begin in Chicago involving the FBI & Chicago PD’s Special Investigations unit. The investigation leads to a massacre at Chicago PD headquarters, but is ultimately resolved at Marcone's estate." Could that realistically be all we need in that section? Rather than that monstrosity that’s currently there? Coz if we have something around that size for each book then that page will become the biggest one we have.